From: Molly de Blanc <molly@fsf.org>
Date: Wed, 22 Nov 2017 17:54:53 +0000 (-0500)
Subject: edits to stay away from.
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edits to stay away from.
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diff --git a/v8/givingguide.html b/v8/givingguide.html
index 152e7ac..d70f685 100644
--- a/v8/givingguide.html
+++ b/v8/givingguide.html
@@ -229,7 +229,7 @@
               <li>
                 Apple uses <a href="https://www.defectivebydesign.org/what_is_drm_digital_restrictions_management">Digital Restrictions Management (DRM)</a> to block competing software.
               </li>
-	      <li>Avoid: iPhone 8 Plus, iPhone 8</li>
+	      <li>Also avoid: iPhone 8 Plus, iPhone 8</li>
             </ul>
           </div>
           <!--End Bad-->
@@ -316,7 +316,8 @@
               </li>
               <!-- Commented out pending citation or confirmation <li>Includes Management Engine, a hardware-based backdoor that gives Intel a permanent backdoor into your computer.</li>-->
               <li>Mandatory Windows updates force users to test potentially unstable new versions. <a href="https://www.fsf.org/campaigns/windows">Read more about Windows's abuses.</a></li>
-	     <li>Avoid: Dell Inspiron Touch-Screen, HP Omen, and MacBook Pro</li>
+	     <li>Avoid: Dell Inspiron Touch-Scree and HP Omen.</li>
+	     <li>Also avoid: MacBook Pro</li>
 	     </ul>
           </div>
           <!--End Bad-->
@@ -410,7 +411,8 @@
                  Apple app stores use <a href="https://www.defectivebydesign.org/what_is_drm_digital_restrictions_management">DRM</a> to restrict what you can do with your purchases.
               </li>
               <li>Comes crawling with <a href="https://www.gnu.org/philosophy/proprietary-surveillance.html#SpywareInMacOS">spyware</a>.</li>
-	      <li>Avoid: MacBook Air, Asus Zenbook, Lenovo Ideapad</li>
+	      <li>Avoid: MacBook Air</li>
+	      <li>Also avoid: Asus Zenbook, Lenovo Ideapad</li>
             </ul>
           </div>
           <!--End Bad-->
@@ -484,7 +486,7 @@
                 data.
               </li>
  <li>Mandatory Windows updates force users to test potentially unstable new versions. <a href="https://www.fsf.org/campaigns/windows">Read more about Windows's abuses.</a></li>
- <li>Avoid: Lenovo Yoga, iPad, Windows Ink</li>
+ <li>Also avoid: Lenovo Yoga, iPad, Windows Ink</li>
             </ul>
           </div>
           <!--End Bad-->