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             <h1>Does the gift you're giving your loved ones respect their rights?</h1>
-                       <p>Let your loved ones know that you respect them too much
-to give them gifts that invade their privacy and abuse their freedom.
-This Giving Guide is full of gifts that you can feel good about
-instead.</p>
-                       <p>When we allow <a href="https://gnu.org/proprietary">proprietary software</a> created by Facebook, Amazon, Apple, Google, and countless other companies to handle our basic computing tasks, we put an enormous amount of power in their hands, power which they freely exploit. It's only through using <a href="https://www.gnu.org/philosophy/free-sw.html">free software</a>, and <a href="https://ryf.fsf.org">devices running free software</a>, that we can seize this power back.</p>
 <p>When picking a gift this year, we urge you to think carefully about
 the choice you're making. Is that smart assistant smart enough to
 respect your friend or family member's rights? Does that tablet really
 have their best interest in mind? Or does that shiny gadget come at a
 cost much higher than its price tag?</p>
+                       <p>When we allow <a href="https://gnu.org/proprietary">proprietary software</a> created by Facebook, Amazon, Apple, Google, and countless other companies to handle our basic computing tasks, we put an enormous amount of power in their hands, power which they freely exploit. It's only through using <a href="https://www.gnu.org/philosophy/free-sw.html">free software</a>, and <a href="https://ryf.fsf.org">devices running free software</a>, that we can seize this power back.</p>
                        <h4>Freedom is the gift that keeps on giving</h4>
 <p>Letting your loved ones know that
 you respect their privacy and freedom too much to cave in for the
@@ -739,8 +735,8 @@ advertisers.</p>
 
             <h5 class="text-center">Stay away from: Google Pixel</h5>
             <ul class="cons">
-<li>The Google Pixel line (and most Android devices) are not only
-  restricted by Widevine DRM, they also come with
+<li>The Google Pixel line (and most Android devices) aren't just
+  restricted by Widevine DRM. They also come with
 <a href="https://gnu.org/proprietary">proprietary</a> Google apps that
 <a href="https://www.gnu.org/proprietary/malware-google.html">subjugate users</a>.</li>
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