From: Molly de Blanc <molly@fsf.org>
Date: Tue, 6 Nov 2018 20:55:39 +0000 (-0500)
Subject: updated giving guide.
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updated giving guide.
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           <div class="intro-text col-md-6">
             <h1>Give the gift of freedom!</h1>
 
-	    <p>New electronics can be the highlight of your holiday, but so many of the phones, computers, and toys come with proprietary software and privacy disrespecting and surveillance tools hidden inside.</p>
-<p>This guide replaces these holiday humbugs with better devices from ethical companies&mdash;no <a href="https://gnu.org/proprietary" style="color: gold">creepy remote deletion of files or punitive and mean rules about copying and sharing</a>. Just products and software that respect the freedom and privacy of your loved ones: gifts you can feel good about.</p>
-<p>We also hope the Guide will help you find new ways to talk about why these kinds of devices are risky to your user freedom, and why it's important to respect your freedoms.</p>
+	    <p>New electronic gadgets make great presents for family and friends, but so many of the phones, computers, and toys come with proprietary programs, privacy-disrespecting software, and surveillance tools hidden inside.</p>
+	    <p>This guide replaces these holiday humbugs with better devices from ethical companies &mdash; no <a href="https://gnu.org/proprietary" style="color: gold">creepy remote deletion of files or punitive and mean rules about copying and sharing</a>. Just products and software that respect the freedom and privacy of your loved ones: gifts you can feel good about.</p>
+	    
+<p>Most of the devices in this list carry a <a href="https://fsf.org/ryf">Respects Your Freedom</a> (RYF) hardware product certification, which means that the product meets our high standards for endorsement. RYF-certified devices make great purchases and great gifts at any time of year – learn more and explore the full list [at our Web site](https://www.fsf.org/resources/hw/endorsement/respects-your-freedom).</p>
+
+<p>We also hope that our Giving Guide will help you find new ways to talk about how these kinds of devices deny users their freedom, and why it's important to respect your freedoms.</p>
+
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         </div>
       </div>
@@ -175,7 +179,7 @@
                 </p>
                 <a href="https://tehnoetic.com/tehnoetic-s3-phone-replicant" class="seller action-button">Technoethical</a>
                 <div class="sale-info links">
-                  <a href="#technoethical-promotion">Sale details.</a>
+                  <a href="#technoethical-promotion">Sale details</a>
                 </div>
               </div>
             </div>
@@ -190,7 +194,7 @@
                 </p>
                 <a href="https://tehnoetic.com/tehnoetic-s3-phone-replicant" class="seller action-button">Technoethical</a>
                 <p class="sale-info links">
-                  <a href="#technoethical-promotion">Sale details.</a>
+                  <a href="#technoethical-promotion">Sale details</a>
                 </p>
                 <!-- End Sale Info -->
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@@ -216,14 +220,14 @@
                 Features <a href="https://www.f-droid.org/">F-Droid</a>, the free software catalog that makes it easy to get all the applications you need without sacrificing control of your phone.
               </li>
 	      <li>10% of sales profits from Technoethical are donated to Replicant.</li>
-	      <li>Note: While the main processor is exclusively running free software, the modem processor runs a Samsung nonfree system.</li>
+	      <li>Note: While the main processor exclusively runs free software, the modem processor runs a Samsung nonfree system.</li>
             </ul>
 
             <h5 class="text-center">Stay away from: iPhone</h5>
             <ul class="cons">
               <li>Comes with no shortage of <a href="https://www.gnu.org/philosophy/proprietary-surveillance.html#SpywareIniThings">spyware</a>.</li>
               <li>
-                iOS is a fully <a href="https://gnu.org/proprietary">proprietary operating system</a>, giving Apple control over the software on the devices
+                iOS is a fully <a href="https://gnu.org/proprietary">proprietary operating system</a>, giving Apple control over the software on every Apple device.
               </li>
 	      <li>Avoid: iPhone XR, iPhone XS, iPhone X, and other models.</li>
             </ul>
@@ -265,7 +269,7 @@
 		</p>
 		 <a href="https://tehnoetic.com/tet-t400" class="seller action-button">Technoethical</a>
                 <p class="sale-info links">
-                  <a href="#technoethical-promotion">Sale details.</a>
+                  <a href="#technoethical-promotion">Sale details</a>
                 </p>
               </div>
             </div>
@@ -283,15 +287,15 @@
 		</p>
 		 <a href="https://tehnoetic.com/tet-t400" class="seller action-button">Technoethical</a>
                 <p class="sale-info links">
-                  <a href="#technoethical-promotion">Sale details.</a>
+                  <a href="#technoethical-promotion">Sale details</a>
                 </p>
               </div>
             </noscript>
             <!-- End Buy/Download button -->
 
             <ul class="pros">
-	      <p>Why it's cool: The T400 is a popular laptop for running GNU/Linux because of how well-suited it is to work and play. Now you can get it completely free, with these RYF certified options.</p>
-	      <p>Setting up a fully free system is easier than it used to be, but can still seem daunting&mdash;especially if you've never done it before. Luckily, you can now get a new-to-you laptop that's ready to go out of the box.</p>
+	      <p>Why it's cool: The T400 is a popular laptop for running GNU/Linux because of how well-suited it is to work and play. Now you can get it completely free, with these RYF-certified options.</p>
+	      <p>Setting up a fully free system is easier than it used to be, but can still seem daunting &mdash; especially if you've never done it before. Luckily, you can now get a new-to-you laptop that's ready to go out of the box.</p>
 	      <p>Technoethical also has a <a href="https://tehnoetic.com/laptops/tet-t400s">T400s</a> available.</p>
 	    </ul>
 
@@ -302,16 +306,15 @@
           <div class="good col-md-6 col-sm-6">
 	      <ul class="pros">
               <li>Runs the <a href="https://www.gnu.org/distros/free-distros.en.html">FSF-endorsed</a> Trisquel operating system and libreboot firmware.</li>
-              <li>Durable hardware is meant to last and be easy to repair.</li>
+              <li>Durable hardware is meant to last, and is easy to repair.</li>
               <li>Created by small businesses that replace all restrictive components from a stock laptop.</li>
 	      <li>Whether you purchase from Minifree or Technoethical, your T400 will be Respects your Freedom certified.</li>
             </ul>
             <h5 class="text-center">Stay away from: Microsoft Windows</h5>
             <ul class="cons">
-             <li>Runs on <a href="https://gnu.org/proprietary">proprietary software</a> that profits from treating the user as a product&mdash;<a href="https://privacy.microsoft.com/en-US/privacystatement">forces users to consent to data collection</a> for purposes including "targeted advertising."
+             <li>Runs on <a href="https://gnu.org/proprietary">proprietary software</a> that profits from treating the user as a product &mdash; <a href="https://privacy.microsoft.com/en-US/privacystatement">forces users to consent to data collection</a> for purposes including "targeted advertising."
               </li>
               <li>Mandatory Windows updates force users to test potentially unstable new versions. <a href="https://www.fsf.org/campaigns/windows">Read more about Windows's abuses.</a></li>
-	     <li>You can find Windows on computers like the Dell Inspiron, HP EliteBook, and Lenovo Ideapad.</li>
 	     <li>Looking at a computer that includes an Intel CPU? Intel comes with <a href="https://www.fsf.org/blogs/sysadmin/the-management-engine-an-attack-on-computer-users-freedom">Management Engine</a>, a hardware-based backdoor that gives Intel a permanent backdoor into your computer.</li>
 	     </ul>
           </div>
@@ -385,7 +388,7 @@
             <ul class="pros">
 	      <p>Why it's cool: Take it to the office, take it to the cafe, take it to class, take it home and set it up on the counter so you can rock out while you cook. Do all of this the easy way.</p>
 
-<p>This machine is made to go everywhere with you and thanks to our friends who make RYF products, you can have your mobility and your freedom too.</p>
+<p>This machine is made to go everywhere with you, and thanks to our friends who make RYF-certified products, you can have your mobility and your freedom, too.</p>
             </ul>
 
           </div>
@@ -395,14 +398,15 @@
           <div class="good col-md-6 col-sm-6">
             <ul class="pros">
              <li>Runs the <a href="https://www.gnu.org/distros/free-distros.en.html">FSF-endorsed</a> Trisquel operating system with libreboot firmware. The X200 sold by Libiquity is also certified to <a href="https://www.fsf.org/ryf">Respect Your Freedom</a>.</li>
-              <li>Durable hardware is meant to last and is easy to repair.</li>
+              <li>Durable hardware is meant to last, and is easy to repair.</li>
               <li>Created by a small business that replaces all restrictive components from a stock laptop.</li>
           <h5 class="text-center">Stay away from: Apple</h5>
           <ul class="cons">
 	    <li>Runs on <a href="https://gnu.org/proprietary">proprietary software</a> that restricts the user's freedoms.</li>
               <li>Apple has been <a href="https://motherboard.vice.com/en_us/article/evmeya/apple-iphone-right-to-repair-california">opposing the Right to Repair</a> for years.</li>
               <li>Comes crawling with <a href="https://www.gnu.org/philosophy/proprietary-surveillance.html#SpywareInMacOS">spyware</a>.</li>
-	      <li>Avoid: MacBook Air (and MacBook Pro)</li>
+	    <li>Avoid: MacBook Air (and MacBook Pro).</li>
+	    <li>Note: Apple laptops come complete with Intel Management Engine as well.</li>
             </ul>
           </div>
           <!--End Bad-->
@@ -484,7 +488,7 @@
           <div class="good col-md-6 col-sm-6">
             <ul class="pros">
           <li>Runs the <a href="https://www.gnu.org/distros/free-distros.en.html">FSF-endorsed</a> Trisquel operating system with libreboot firmware.</li>
-              <li>Durable hardware is meant to last and is easy to repair.</li>
+              <li>Durable hardware is meant to last, and is easy to repair.</li>
               <li>Created by a small business that replaces all restrictive components from a stock laptop.</li>
 	      </ul>
             <h5 class="text-center">Stay away from: iPad Pro</h5>
@@ -492,7 +496,7 @@
 		 <li>
                 Apple uses <a href="https://www.defectivebydesign.org/what_is_drm_digital_restrictions_management">Digital Restrictions Management (DRM)</a> to block competing software.
 		 </li>
-		<li>Apple's App Store has been <a href="https://www.defectivebydesign.org/blog/apple_app_store_anniversary_marks_ten_years_proprietary_appsploitation">threatening user freedom for ten years</a>. From user surveillance to allowing governments to control app access, the Apple App Store has it all. </li>
+		<li>Apple's App Store has been <a href="https://www.defectivebydesign.org/blog/apple_app_store_anniversary_marks_ten_years_proprietary_appsploitation">threatening user freedom for ten years</a>. From user surveillance to allowing governments to control app access, the Apple App Store has done it all. </li>
             </ul>
           </div>
           <!--End Bad-->
@@ -522,7 +526,7 @@
                 </p>
                 <a href="https://store.vikings.net/libre-friendly-hardware/vikings-d16-workstation" class="seller action-button">Vikings</a>
                 <p class="sale-info links">
-		 The D16 Workstation is not Respects Your Freedom certified at this point. <a href="#vikings-promotion">Sale details.</a>
+	        <a href="#vikings-promotion">Sale details.</a>
                 </p>
               </div>
             </div>
@@ -546,7 +550,7 @@
             <ul class="pros">
 <p>Why it's cool: Sometimes you need heavy-duty computing power that a laptop just can't provide.</p>
 
-<p>Gamers, video editors, and other users may want or need a more powerful machine – a desktop is the answer when you really need that extra push. Also good for users who want a bigger screen.</p>
+<p>Gamers, video editors, and other users may want or need a more powerful machine &mdash;  a desktop is the answer when you really need that extra push. Also good for users who want a bigger screen.</p>
             </ul>
 
           </div>
@@ -555,9 +559,10 @@
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           <div class="good col-md-6 col-sm-6">
 	      <ul class="pros">
-		<li>Options of coming with the <a href="https://www.gnu.org/distros/free-distros.en.html">FSF-endorsed</a> Trisquel or Parabola operating systems.</li>
-		<li>Free boot firmware.</li>
-		<li>Customize and specialize to your needs.</li>
+		<li>Choose from two operating systems: the <a href="https://www.gnu.org/distros/free-distros.en.html">FSF-endorsed</a> Trisquel. or Parabola.</li>
+		<li>Comes with free boot firmware.</li>
+		<li>You can customize and specialize this model to your needs – the essence of user freedom!</li>
+
             </ul>
             <h5 class="text-center">Stay away from: Apple iMac</h5>
             <ul class="cons">
@@ -619,7 +624,7 @@
             </noscript>
             <!-- End Buy/Download button -->
             <ul class="pros">
-              <p>Why it's cool: Think ahead&mdash;if you give this to your friend or relative, they might use it next year to make YOU a gift.</p>
+              <p>Why it's cool: Think ahead &mdash; if you give this to your friend or relative, they might use it next year to make YOU a gift.</p>
 
 <p>3D printers are an amazing learning and exploration tool for kids and a fun toy for grownups, and they've come a long way from their origins in the early 2000s. Keep it free and fun by digging into the zillions of free software options for modeling, and communities that share freely licensed designs.</p>
 	    </ul>
@@ -881,7 +886,7 @@
             <h5 class="text-center">DRM-free Ebooks</h5>
 
             <ul class="pros">
-	      <p>There are <a href="https://www.defectivebydesign.org/guide/ebooks">a lot of options</a> for where to get your literature fix without any pesky DRM. We're highlighting some publishers and shops who are offering deals for you!</p>
+	      <p>There are <a href="https://www.defectivebydesign.org/guide/ebooks">plenty of places</a> to get your literature fix without any pesky DRM. We're highlighting some publishers and shops who are offering deals for you!</p>
 	      <li><a href="https://www.delphiclassics.com/">Delphi Classics</a> has a wide range of classic literature available in English, French, German, Italian, and Spanish. Use the code <b>fsfdelphi</b> for <b>30% off</b> orders over $10 through the end of December.</li>
 	      <li><a href="https://tienda.edicionesbabylon.es/en/">Ediciones Babylon</a> can supply you with all of your Spanish language needs for comics, art, novellas, and novels. Use the code <b>FSFDISCOUNTEB</b> for <b>5% off</b> all the way through March 2018.</li>
             <li><a href="https://www.nostarch.com/">No Starch Press</a> specializes in educational, instructional, and how-to books on everything from arduinos to system administration. Use the code <b>ETHICTECH</b> for <b>40% off</b> through January 10th, 2018.</li>
@@ -896,7 +901,7 @@
 	      <ul class="pros">
             <h5 class="text-center">Stay away from: Amazon</h5>
             <ul class="cons">
-              <li>Amazon is one of the <a href="https://www.defectivebydesign.org/amazon">most notorious of DRM offenders</a>. Whether it's their Kindle e-reader or their countless DRM-encumbered ebooks, Amazon is the place to go if you want to <a href="https://www.defectivebydesign.org/amazon-kindle-swindle">let someone else snatch away texts</a> from your personal library.</li>
+              <li>Amazon is one of the <a href="https://www.defectivebydesign.org/amazon">most notorious DRM offenders</a>. Whether it's their Kindle ebook reader or their countless DRM-encumbered ebooks, Amazon is the place to go if you want to <a href="https://www.defectivebydesign.org/amazon-kindle-swindle">let someone else snatch away texts</a> from your personal library.</li>
 	      <li><a href="https://www.defectivebydesign.org/">Read more about DRM, the risks it poses, and the damage it causes</a>.
             </ul>
           </div>
@@ -927,8 +932,8 @@
 	  <!--start bad-->
           <div class="good col-md-6 col-sm-6">
             <ul class="cons">
-	      <h5 class="text-center">Stay away from: Spotify</h5>
-           <p>Spotify isn't the only offender when it comes to putting DRM in music&mdash;all major streaming services do this with the support of big record labels.</p>
+	      <h5 class="text-center">Stay away from: Spotify (and all other major streaming services)</h5>
+           <p>Spotify is only one of many offenders when it comes to putting DRM in music: all major streaming services do this, with the support of big record labels.</p>
 	   <p>In addition to streaming music encumbered by DRM, people who want to use Spotify are required to install additional proprietary software. Even <a href="https://www.spotify.com/us/download/linux/">Spotify's client for GNU/Linux</a> relies on proprietary software.</p>
             </ul>
           </div>
@@ -980,7 +985,7 @@
         <h2 class="title text-center"></h2>
         <div class="row is-table-row">
           <div class="good col-md-6 col-sm-6" style="position:relative">
-	      <p>Sadly, there is not always the opportunity to choose freedom. You have to decide what is the right thing for you to do. We've highlighted some of the types of devices where there isn't a good choice. We hope you'll take this list as inspiration for the free software projects you contribue to and support.</p>
+	      <p>Sadly, there is not always the opportunity to choose freedom. You have to decide what is the right thing for you to do. We've highlighted some of the types of devices where there isn't a good choice. We hope you'll take this list as inspiration for the free software projects you contribute to and support.</p>
           </div>
           <!--End Good-->
 
@@ -990,7 +995,7 @@
 	    <h5 class="text-center">In need of development</h5>
 	    <ul class="cons">
 	      <li>Cameras</li>
-	      <li>E-readers</li>
+	      <li>Ebook readers</li>
 	      <li>Fitness trackers</li>
 	      <li>Smart watches</li>
 	      <li>Video gaming systems</liz.
@@ -998,7 +1003,7 @@
 	    <h5 class="text-center">Stay away from: These devices</h5>
             <ul class="cons">
 	      <li>Internet of Things connected home appliances, smart speakers, and virtual assistants are little more than spying devices brought into your home.</li>
-	      <li>Self-driving cars are full of proprietary software, posing a risk to cyclists, pedestrians, and riders. <a href="https://www.theguardian.com/technology/2017/jul/31/tesla-model-3-electric-car-doesnt-have-key-things-we-learned-speedometer-battery-sleep">Read more about</a> the Tesla Model 3's anti-features and autopilot system.</li>
+	      <li>Self-driving cars are full of proprietary software, and they also pose a terrible risk to cyclists, pedestrians, and riders. <a href="https://www.theguardian.com/technology/2017/jul/31/tesla-model-3-electric-car-doesnt-have-key-things-we-learned-speedometer-battery-sleep">Read more about</a> the Tesla Model 3's anti-features and autopilot system.</li>
             </ul>
           </div>
           <!--End Bad-->
@@ -1065,7 +1070,7 @@
                       Receive a 5% discount on any items you buy from the Web site. Ends at 00:00 EST on February 1st, 2017. Use the coupon code <span class="label label-default">FSFHOLIDAYS</span> at checkout.</li> -->
                       <li id="lulzbot-promotion"><strong>LulzBot: </strong><a href="https://www.lulzbot.com/lulzbot-sales-clearance-items">features sales and clearance items on their Web site.</li>
 		      <li id="thinkpenguin-promotion"><strong>ThinkPenguin:</strong> 5% discount on <b>all</b> products is available to <a href="https://fsf.org/join">FSF members</a>, and a special 7% discount for the Giving Guide, using the code <span class="label label-default"> FSFMEMBER</span>.</li>
-                      <li id="vikings-promotion"><strong>Vikings:</strong> 5% discount on <b>all</b> products and services between now and February 1, 2019. <b>Help the FSF!</b> Vikings will also make a donation for each product purchased using this code. Use the coupon code  <span class="label label-default">fsfftw</span>.</li>
+                      <li id="vikings-promotion"><strong>Vikings:</strong> 5% discount on <b>all</b> products and services between now and February 1, 2019. <b>Help the FSF:</b> Vikings will also make a donation to the FSF for each product purchased using the coupon code  <span class="label label-default">fsfftw</span>.</li>
 
 </ul>
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